The ______(Issue being explored/problem)____ are/is _____(why it’s a problem- for whom, in what ways, etc.)_____________, and unless __________(proposed solution/action)_________, _____(predict the effect)________may/will happen.
Example:
The students at I.S 93 are not allowed to take their laptops home which makes it impossible for many students to complete their schoolwork. Unless the school takes notice of this problem, and grant students the right to take the laptops home, students will never learn responsibility nor achieve the academic success in which they are capable of.
- You are not looking for ways to fix this problem nor are you looking to analyze the data. You are simply stating the facts and trying to prove that there is, in fact, a problem
Of the 100 people surveyed, 95% believe that students should be allowed to take their laptops home. Furthermore, the data shows that 98% of those surveyed say they would use the laptops to complete school work while at home. 78% say there was not enough time to finish class work and 56% say they have problems transferring files between their home/library and school. This result is important because even while 55% of students have a computer at home, if a student cannot access their school files, those computers are essentially worthless. With that said, Mr. Wright, an expert on computer development in I.S. 93 stated that “things went very well” when another class was given permission to take the laptops home as a test. Along those same lines, many students, according to Mr. Wright say that they “don't have Internet or Microsoft Office suite [at home].” If students were allowed to bring their laptops home, this would not be an issue.
Writing the Discussion Section:
In this section, you must discuss possible solutions.
A solution is only a solution if it:
- Makes the situation better
- it is acceptable to those who are involved
- it is possible
- it requires a manageable amount of energy and/or resources
What are some possible solutions?
What makes this solution better than another one?
Example:
If the students were allowed to take the laptops home, many respondents have stated that this will make them more responsible as a student. In this manner, students will be able to have the responsibility of taking care of the laptops and will, as a consequence, allow teachers to trust students more. Many respondents offered possible solutions to this problem. One respondent said that “Students could be allowed to take the laptops home for a trial period. At the end of the trial period, an assessment should be given. If the laptops are in good condition and it seems that students are being responsible, a decision could be made to allow students to take home the laptops on a more permanent basis.” This might prove as an efficient way to see if students are serious about this commitment.
According to Mr. Wright, a computer expert at I.S93, “We've already had a group go out of the building. Ms. Ochoa's class took some Apple computers home over the Christmas vacation as a sort of test, and it went really well.” This shows that it is, in fact, possible.
Writing the Closing
· State the problem
· Make sure you explain (again) what will happen if no action is taken (should be something bad)
· Explain the recommended course of action
· What will that action accomplish?
Example:
Since the students at I.S 93 are not allowed to take their laptops home, many are finding it difficult to complete school work and to stay up to date in their classes. Unless the school takes notice of this problem, the students’ grades will suffer, and, consequently, they might be held back for that year. The administration should give students a chance to prove themselves responsible enough to take the laptops home. This will improve the quality of their education dramatically.
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